Sorry I was just kidding: to make up for it ill give a real opinion;

I like your use of broken sentences to put emphasis on certain points, well wtitten so that it deals with love, but at the same time doesn't sound cheesy, that is very hard to do. Was it written for someone in particular in your life or just for fun? By the way ignore the comments about not having flow because that was on purpose right?... right? oh yeah and change the strain to strand