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Child's View. The Iceskats.
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Posted 2009-11-09, 06:56 PM in reply to
Mdselctr
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"Good ideas."
Honestly, I think it would have been perfectly fine if you had written it with somewhat proper english from the perspective of a child. The overly broken english kinda takes away from the emotion.
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