My works of literature

I love to write and I like to know what people think of my writing so, i decided to post some of it on here for everyone to read and let me know their opinion...

Prelude To A Kiss

(I won $200 for this one at my school)

Flames flicker and waiver, dancing they burn
Midnight voices resound in a chorus
Shadows dance beside the passion they yearn
Through the intertwining darkened forests
Of fickle sea and emotionless winter
Silhouettes of this dead, bleak december
Everythings but ash, ember and cinder
The insensate ignites, souls remember
Tide crashes upon the wading shore
Closer, ever closer, mornings presence
Breathe into blackened darkness, nevermore
hues of amber, scents of finest essence
Shiver and look into the depths of fire
One final moment, before all alters
See it shimmer, the heart of desire
Gently now, hesitant, heaven saunters
Towards The emptiness, sensing its bliss
In this one moment, prelude to a kiss




Thieves Ballad


Dancing upon the trepid path
In the shadow of night
I move swiftly, without a sound
Silent and out of sight

My soul is dark, my heart is too
I spend my days in flight
Never staying in any place
My life is black and white

Try to catch me, you never will
I deceive all but time
I am a devoted master
An artist of all crime

I take your treasures for my own
my crafty hands are skilled
Stealing all you own, no remorse
Though no blood have i spilled

I disappear at mornings light
The moon is my own mask
I shall return at midnights veil
To carry out my task

I am what you would call a thief
I hide in your blind sight
I dance upon the trepid path
In the shadow of night