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Posted 2009-08-08, 12:07 AM in reply to Skurai's post starting "Lobsters do it, dogs do it, humans do..."
Skurai said: [Goto]
Lobsters do it, dogs do it, humans do it...
If you intend to construct a commencing series, at least
use a coordinating conjunction in your last member; or,
the last member of the series should lead to a climax.
Unfortunately, the fact that humans do 'it' (who's ante-
cedent is 'all mammals flirt') leaves the reader expect-
ing more. Therefore, your sentence has a comical affect
that makes one wonder if the outcome was intended. A more
definite sentence would follow the law of parallelism.
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