Poem for Harmony

this one is for you Harmony:
I will always be with you
this is something I thought you knew
I want you to be my wife
when it is the right moment in life.
I love you and that will never change
even if our relationship becomes long range
being far away won't change the way I feel
nothing will ever break this seal
the seal I have is a seal called love
it won't break, Harmony,my love
we have been dating for almost a quarter of a year
losing you is my greatest fear
without you I would be sad
you are the only girlfriend I have ever had
meeting you was a very important day
I was too shy to tell you I liked you that way
now you know that I love you
now what I want to hear is a reply from you

awwwww dan is in love

awwwww dan is in love

yes I am.I will make another poem here when I feel like it.

kinda off topic but... you are in highschool right?

It matters not whether you win or lose; what matters is whether I win or lose.

What would you do if I said that harmony was having an afair? Would you make a nice hate poem for us all to hear?

kinda off topic but... you are in highschool right?

No, he is in college.

There goes Zagggon fueling the fire

Thats a very nice poem man, hope everything works out for you and her

What would you do if I said that harmony was having an afair? Would you make a nice hate poem for us all to hear?

I already know she isn't having an affair and if she did I would be too sad to make a poem unless it was a sad poem.I doubt I would be able to make a hate poem.

kinda off topic but... you are in highschool right?

I am in college like Sovereign said.Why did you ask if I was in High School?

Thats a very nice poem man, hope everything works out for you and her

thank you for the compliment and thank you for hoping everything works out for us.I hope any relationships you are in work out as well.

As I had told you before, I really don't consider myself to be a poet, but since you tend to insist that I am and asked for my opinion on your poem, I'll comply.

Is this your first poem? If so, it actually is rather good, IMHO. The rhyming was nicely done. However, the last line, I think, needs to be re-phrased. It's just my opinion, and you don't have to agree with me, but it seems...I dunno...out of place? Almost as if you're demanding a response from her.

But it still is pretty good. O.o

As I had told you before, I really don't consider myself to be a poet, but since you tend to insist that I am and asked for my opinion on your poem, I'll comply. Is this your first poem? If so, it actually is rather good, IMHO. The rhyming was nicely done. However, the last line, I think, needs to be re-phrased. It's just my opinion, and you don't have to agree with me, but it seems...I dunno...out of place? Almost as if you're demanding a response from her. But it still is pretty good. O.o

I do want a response from her.If she wrote a poem as a reply it would make it even better.

Aah. I see. Okay, then. Omit what I said, I guess.

I'm in love too, and I plan on marrying her, honestly, we are going too. We're deeply in love, and it's not for the lust, b/c frankly we didn't do anything really yet. Age doesn't mater, but the heart does.

good luck with your relationship man.I hope you two are together as long as Harmony and I will be together which is forever.

i like your poem i think it is sweet and romantic

i like your poem i think it is sweet and romantic

I know.I wish I could get more people's oppinions here at zelaron though.I want to see what people think of my poem.

I am a fucking moron. Pay no attention to this post plz.

Edited by Sovereing

MATT, STOP FUCKING THROWING INSULTS AROUND

Pimpiroth, you're lucky as fuck that Sov caught you before I did. You've been warned. Flame anyone in this forum again, and you'll be staring down the business end of the banned stick, capische?

Flame anyone in this forum again, and you'll be staring down the business end of the banned stick, capische?

Who did he flame anyway.I don't like how he flamed someone in the thread that I made for my poem.

I don't know who he was flaming. Sov edited his entire post before I had a chance to see it. However, in Sov's edit, he told your brother to stop throwing insults around. Insults = Flames and Flames in the Literature Forum = No More Chances. One more time and he's out of here.